Monday, July 20, 2009

New draft (thank you Marti!)

Starting from Here, Where do We Move?

I am from cheeseburgers

and french fries, real

ice cream milkshakes, and

bleach rags, bleach rags, bleach rags.


By the back door, cooks crouch,

roll cigarettes, argue

about hip-hop and closing, stroke

each others egos.

I slide toward the dumpster while they

kick the edge of the greased glazed ice.

Soda drips on my shoes.


It’s been dark since

we got here. And I am from

tinny muzac and the long catwalk

with a stack of food. From

“order up” and “on the fly,”

from the cold slap

of the walk –in.


Becca and I dance with our hands

full, our hips swing around corners.

We are six more hours, three more

hours, one more. A fist

full of cash.

3 comments:

  1. what a handful of images! i truly enjoyed this poem...thank you for sharing

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  2. I love this poem, but would have to see the first one to see what changes were made. The last verse creates such an image!

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  3. <3 <3 <3 You are amazing and this poem just made me so happy. fwiw, it made me happy before I saw my name in :)

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